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| saturn at equinox |
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when darkness fades, and dawn lights up your eyes,
deep in the morning silence we make love –
melt in the dream of a day as night dies.
i come to life in your love, and realize
you’re the sun-cusped girl i’ve always dreamed of
when darkness fades, and dawn lights up your eyes.
you turn me on each waking hour, sunrise
to sunrise, all radiating love –
melt in the dream of a day as night dies,
as earth tilts, night and day merge, and we rise
at the equinox – emotion’s axes move
when darkness fades, and dawn lights up your eyes.
spectral in the shadows, dark matter flies
while we explore each arc of our subsolar love –
melt in the dream of a day as night dies.
we find ourselves – feverish fantasies,
bodies in ethereal motion, orbiting love
when darkness fades, and dawn lights up your eyes –
melt in the dream of a day as night dies.
freddie
About freddie
This is very lovely and works on all levels, despite you having suspected of the Villanelle:
the form’s constraints give a spurious
sonority to phrasings which would sound
sentimental and affected when expressed
without the evocative rhythmic repetitions
Ha! Not so.
Now, what about a Sestina…
splendide!
a villanelle for modern man!