grounded – a thing for me – split-line sonnet

not for me

those clouds that fluff the sky and

shift their shape like ghosts

*

haunting heaven,

inhabiting while whiting out

our snowy floating formless hopes –

*

not for me

the worn-in practised phrase

that targets

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some soft weakness of our stricken hearts,

but always misses,

misses

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tittle-tattling flattery that bigs

us up

yet disses, disses –

*

o not for me

those chilled and flaky

trout-lipped puppet tendernesses

*

nor for me

those strung-out wants that need yet never do,

they’ll never do:

*

not for me a life that’s lost for lack of you.

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for me then what is left to make my day?

for me your hand and head and heart and kiss

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that permeate

the mark of love which others miss,

miss

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mashing us while world spins on around us in its feckless way:

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but all those flakes

who flurry through the sky, who

flourish infelicitously

*

without a touch from you

to ground them cannot be

a thing for me.

*

**

*

omm

november 2018

Comments

  1. Further adumbrations: clouds – shadowing, fluffing the sky like assiduous, nimble-mouthed porn-star assistants, haunting heaven and, most intriguingly, “inhabiting while whiting out” our hopes.

  2. James Wood says

    This metaphor of clouds taking possession of our hopes, whilst concurrently wiping them out, is profoundly disturbing, and the words of a narrator seemingly disaffected, cast into brooding shadow by aery nature’s impacts.

    The image of hopes “whited out” carries some eery incidental punning, combining weather effects with pornographic effects, and so further fleshing out the porn-film metaphor to which you allude, Amaya.

  3. Amaya Singh says

    The narrator says such things are not for her, James – leaving it open whether they do not affect, apply, or appeal to her, or whether their operations are actively uncongenial to her.

    It is at this point furthermore in the balance whether she is excluding or raising barriers, or whether they’re being imposed on her. This has obvious feminist implications in terms of interpretation.

    And fittingly, at this very point, the focus shifts: to language, and it’s (mis)use to flatter, deceive – ultimately in a way that disses, with insincere “puppet” tendernesses, which may also miss the very weaknesses they target.

    The puppets – or rather, their strings – reappear in the next section as the “strung out wants that need yet never do” – desires repressed, incapable of action.

    Language is at once a means to express this repression and a tool or means for its enforcement.

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